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I'll go as Luke Skywalker
(shirking my duties on the farm)
You can be Princess Leia
(in her white gown, captive)

At first people will wonder if there's something
between us—until they realise
(there is)
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Because everyone loves Star Wars themed poetry =p

Alternative form for final stanza:

At first people will wonder
if there's something between us--until they realise
(there is)

Any thoughts?

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:iconlank10:
Realize is spelled with a 'z'.

--
Silence the violence; release the peace.

Haikus are easy,
But sometimes they don't make sense.
Refrigerator
:iconlank10:
I'm sorry, I'm incredibly anal.

--
Silence the violence; release the peace.

Haikus are easy,
But sometimes they don't make sense.
Refrigerator
:iconottersandsky:
It's not where we come from. =p
:iconlank10:
Oh, damn. Sorry about that, then. Silly American that I am. :)

--
Silence the violence; release the peace.

Haikus are easy,
But sometimes they don't make sense.
Refrigerator
:iconlank10:
And stupid.

--
Silence the violence; release the peace.

Haikus are easy,
But sometimes they don't make sense.
Refrigerator
:iconottersandsky:
Lol it's all right. No harm done.
:iconottersandsky:
Not at all! Don't say that. :)
:iconnemonus:
Good. Nice pace and use of hyphens and parenthesis, things I too am fond of using. Your words are well-placed and impressively sparce. I'm also particularly fond of the depth brought by the almost afterthought-like addition "captive".
I prefer the first, not the alternative, version of the first stanza--'something' seems to have more suspence than 'realise'.
The only problem I find with this is that the fact that Luke and Leia were brother and sister in the movie brings a little wierdness to a romantic relationship between costumers of those characters, however, I'm not sure whether someone other than me would feel that way in this case.

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"My dad speaks Mandalorian--I mean Mandarin." ~Sar Sha

“Children are innocent and love justice, while most of us are wicked and naturally prefer mercy.”~Chesterton
:iconpseudometry:
No need to apologise =)

--
'Beauty will save the world'
--Fyodor Dostoevsky
:iconpseudometry:
U.S spelling. I prefer anglicised english over americanized.

--
'Beauty will save the world'
--Fyodor Dostoevsky

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