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Red boat in the harbour,
commercial trawler amidst the blue
like a gunshot-wound
on a cop's patrol shirt
Our office has a view of the sea.
You can see so many things. On the sea.
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MoonlightWillow6 Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011   Writer
I really liked this. It made me stop and think for a moment. The metaphor here was incredibly thought provoking. I also loved the bluntness of the piece. It got to the point.

:heart: Absolutely amazing.
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pseudometry Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011   Writer
Thank you very much! Pleased you liked it :)
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saevuswinds Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2011  Student Writer
Huh, intriguing idea, makes one really think about how things are. Its really short, but if you added more, it could lose its beauty. Good job.
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pseudometry Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2011   Writer
Why thank you, glad to hear that!
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saevuswinds Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2011  Student Writer
no problem

:)
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AlisonBlue Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011  Student Writer
this should win some sort of simile award --
I may have to invent it.
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pseudometry Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011   Writer
In all seriousness though, I think creating a simile award would be excellent. Similes get a bad rap these days.
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AlisonBlue Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011  Student Writer
it's true, isn't it, and I don't like most
of the ones I come across (yours more
than crossed the finish line, though.)
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pseudometry Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011   Writer
Indeed. Sometimes, a simile is about as useful as a chocolate teapot.

Well glad you liked it. I did struggle with it for a bit.
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pseudometry Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011   Writer
Haha. You're much too kind :)
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AlisonBlue Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011  Student Writer
no, don't mistake it for kindness.
it's simply admiration.
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pseudometry Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011   Writer
:) Well thank you again!
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2011  Student Writer
That is gritty Jamie, kind of a seaside noir :)
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pseudometry Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2011   Writer
'Seaside noir' -- I like that Dave! Thanks muchly
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dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2011
Your fantastic work has been featured in Friday Night Features
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pseudometry Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011   Writer
Thanks for that, much appreciated :)
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InTheStarryNightSky Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2011
Interesting. A very vivid image. Great job.
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pseudometry Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011   Writer
Thank you
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InTheStarryNightSky Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011
You're welcome.
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EmmaSloane Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2011
love the vivid/surprising image
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pseudometry Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011   Writer
Why thank you, glad to hear it works for you
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Poelee Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011
Interesting comparison...
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pseudometry Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011   Writer
That's kinda how it seemed to me, out the window: a big, ugly, violation
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Poelee Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011
a wound on the environment?
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pseudometry Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011   Writer
Something like that. To be fair it was a very ugly boat; maybe if it had been prettier I'd have had a totally different association, like a berry on a... blue thing of some sort.
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Poelee Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2011
:-) That makes sense
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