this is magical. you've such skill at crafting poems!
i really got sucked in from this line onwards
"and three trees are already gone:"
the repeated "still you play" and "still i seek" are just perfectly placed. the description and the imagery of the trees is really fitting as well.
if i was reviewing this i'd call it "a masterpiece of elegant wordplay and delicate craftsmanship." or something.

for some reason the "your" in line 2 didn't entirely click with me. i wonder if you could personify the saxophone with a "his" or "her"? but that is entirely a matter of personal taste and there's no good reason why it shouldn't stay exactly as it is

Thank you very much, that means a lot coming from a talented wordsmith such as yourself [=
I'm glad you like the repetition, I wasn't sure about it, but as I wrote it those lines kept repeating themselves in my head so I figured why not try it.
I think I have a small obsession with trees. Thanks again.

It's a good point, and I considered it for quite some time. I agree about the second line, but I think for consistency's sake I'd then have to change all the 'you' and 'your' to her, and it would read like:

I have heard her play her saxophone
late at night; her languid notes permeate

and

and still she plays her saxophone
and still I seek her, though I cannot see her

And then it wouldn't seem quite as personal as the 'still I seek you'.

Or maybe, this might work:

I have heard her play her saxophone
late at night; her languid notes permeate

and then

and still you play your saxophone
and still I seek you, though I cannot see you.

What do you think? I would value any thoughts. Maybe I'll stick the two versions in the notes and ask for other people's opinions too.
Thanks again for your kind words and feedback, I appreciate it [=

--
'Beauty will save the world'
--Fyodor Dostoevsky

you're right, "you"/"your" have something personal - and also something neutral. having "her" implies romance, or at the very least something a little bit spiritual/supernatural (i always think of "hers" as goddesses). which is kindof exciting, i suppose, and would fit with some of the mystical imagery

i like having the contrast between the "her" and "you," there is definitely an added impact in the directness of the address to "you" when talking about seeking and seeing. i guess it depends on your vibe of choice

God, it's just beautiful, it seems to me as if it has something of a love-poem in it, and something of a desperation. Trees and saxophones, combined beautifully. I'm not much of a poetry critic, I figured out, so I guess i'll just keep posting my rather unhelpful thoughts about it.

You're brilliant in the way you put together words...I wish you'd write prose sometime, i really do.

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The sleep of reason produces monsters - Fransisco Goya

You know I actually quite like the idea of something ambiguously stuck between romantic and spiritual/supernatural. Hurrmmm.
I must say I'm leaning strongly towards the "her" and "you" contrast, but I think I will let the whole thing incubate for a while longer.
Thanks muchly again for your comments and feedback, it's most valuable.

--
'Beauty will save the world'
--Fyodor Dostoevsky

Thank you so very much; you're right on the money there with thinking it's something of a love-poem and desperation. Very astute, it's more or less exactly what my intention was. Something of the romantic, and something of the desperation. But not too much of either; I figured it showed more that the desideratum was respected and valued in of itself if I controlled my response a bit. If that makes sense.

Well, I always enjoy hearing your thoughts, and sometimes I find them very helpful. Being a critic is overrated anyway, and then some people will probably try to poison you too.

You know I actually do write prose, but it's been over a year since I managed to finish anything. I really should though, and so I will work at it now and submit some prose in a week or so. Please pester me about it if I don't though!

--
'Beauty will save the world'
--Fyodor Dostoevsky

Spooky stalkeresque. Cursory crit- I think though I cannot see you is unnecessary.

--
"To avoid criticism: do nothing, say nothing, be nothing."

Thank you. And thank you for the cursory crit, very much. The repetition was experimental for me, thus I'm pleased to hear any and all opinions on it.

--
'Beauty will save the world'
--Fyodor Dostoevsky

I helps if I can,
as always,
consider the source.

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"To avoid criticism: do nothing, say nothing, be nothing."